Thursday, 8 March 2012

Story for Assignment

“A nerdy bird [Jack] and his friend [Bob] ran across a girl in trouble being chased by an evil robot [Alex], now the evil robot want to get rid of all of them.”

               One day, Jack and Bob is taking their time sitting in the tree. As usual, Jack is busy reading his book, while Bob is fooling around. Suddenly, they saw a girl running to them.
“I’m being chased by a walking piece of metal guys! Please help me!”
               Before they are able to answer anything, she left them while running. Moments later, the robot showed up to them, his form is big, walking with a wheel in his feet, and with a big hand. Without saying anything, he attacked them. Jack and Bob run as fast as possible.
“Hey, over here!”
               The girl hide them in the bush. The robot can’t find them, and went back angrily.
“So, why exactly he is looking for you ? “ asked Jack.
“Well.. my name is Jill ! Nice to meet you.”
“I wasn’t asking for your name in the first place, Jill ! “
“I am Bob, and that’s Jack, nice to meet you!” said Bob.
               Jack let out a sigh, and intends to leave them.
“Wait ! You’ve got to help me, before things get worst !” said Jill.
“So, what’s your problem?” asked Jack.
               Jill began explaining the problem.  She told them that when she was walking around, she plucked out a mushroom , that later tends to be the robot’s antennae. So now the robot is awake and gone berserk.
“Why don’t you just give it back to the robot?” ask Jack.
“Well.. something happened, I dropped the antennae somewhere on the way.”
“Oh my, you are causing us a lot of trouble! Okay anyway, let’s return to my place first. We need some stuff before we proceed.”
               They arrived at a nearby treehouse, where Jack lived. He used his book to make a metal detector to detect the antennae quickly.
“Let the journey begin!!” Jill yelled.
“Yeaaaaaaaaaaaah!” answer Bob, but Jack didn’t say anything, rather than giving a sour face.
               First, they start searching in the swamp.
“Let’s get this done and over with. I don’t like this kind of place.” Jack grumbles.
.Suddenly, the detector give a significant response. Beep,beep,beep. When they look at the signal direction, it turns out to be the Robot!
“ALEXXXX—“ the robot sound.
“Run ! Run ! Run ! I will be the decoy! ” Bob yelled.
Bob get tumbled down and get a flying uppercut from the robot.  But that means nothing for him. Bob can endures a large amount of damage before he faint.
               After they ran far enough, the robot disappeared again, and they continue their journey. The second place, is the jungle. It said that the jungle divided into two parts, the Tiger and the Lion lead two opposing faction.
“I wonder why you ever walked into this place” said Jack.
“Well, I’m just bored !” answer Jill.
               Jack let down a sigh. The metal detector give a response. It looks like that the antennae is moved by someone. They follow the trail deep into the jungle. Found out that the antennae is in the possession of King Tiger. This will be hard because King Tiger is hard to persuade.
“Well, what do you seek, mortals?!”
               

Thursday, 16 February 2012

Designing the visual world

characters
situations
locations
scenarios
atmospheres
colours
costumes hair
props
launguage
music

Some tips
Who are you writing for?
for the teacher

characters : Alien vs Predator
situations : Avatar
locations : Armageddon
scenarios : Lord of The Ring
atmospheres : Saw
colours : Black and White
costumes hair :
props :
language : German
music : Techno


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assignment

Thursday, 5 January 2012

What's Your Story

What makes a good story?
In my opinion :

a. interesting character.

b. good motive.

c. 3 act structure.

d. good progressing throughout the story.

e. have certain mood.

The writer must be able to deliver the mood to the reader so they can feel that they are inside the story.
And the story progress in the right direction so that the reader won't be bored or feel that the story is a bit too rushed. A good story will be able to tell all the important part that the reader need to know. Or be able to make a mystery that still be thinkable by the readers.

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What makes a GOOD story?

- character(s)
> motive
> conflict (drama)
> quest
> turning point
> climax
> resolution

What's your story?

> Genres
> Brainstorm
> 1 Sentence Pitch
> 3 Act Structure

Where do I look for stories
- news
- mag
- our experiences
- other people experiences
- research

Focus

> What is your story about

How do i get my story going?
- premise
- what if
- why not?
- character > something not common (conflict)
- art of telling a story

EXAMPLE

Wall-e
premise - earth will always be our home if there is hope and respect for nature

what if a robot in the future saves a plant so that humans can come back to earth from space?

why not ? a robot as key character / hero

Sunday, 23 October 2011

Script Draft 4



CHARACTER LIST (All characters)

Main characters
Ben
Cat
Cockroaches Gang

Side character
Rat Leader
Dog
           

CHARACTER BIO (Key Characters only)

Ben

Age: 5 months
Type : Rat
Height: 20 cm
Weight: 3kg
Occupation: Cheese Hunter
Trait: Plain, simple minded.


Cat

Age: 1
Type:  Cat
Height: 50cm
Weight: 8kg
Occupation: Rat Hunter
Trait: Negative thinking, Cool.

Gang of Cockroaches

Age : 4 months
Type : Cockroach
Height : A : 10 cm, B : 20 cm, C : 12 cm
Weight : A : 1kg, B : 2kg, C : 1.2kg
Trait : Loves to annoy others. A = Leader, B = Cool, C = Loves to laugh.


     SCRIPT

FAde In:
The usual night
INT, Abandoned House, Night
A lot of rats in the meeting. Ben came in.
RAT LEADER
Listen, folks! We are going to start the meeting!
Rats chattering to each other.
RAT LEADER
Ahmm.. let’s see. Alpha, Romeo, and Ben! The three of you ! Take care of this week’s supplies!
Ben
Aye aye sir.
RAT leader
Any question? If there is none, dismissed!
Other rats dismissed. Ben walks out.

EXT, Street, Night
Ben walks sneakily , and then arrives at an old house. He enters the yard.

EXT, Garden, Night
Ben
This house seems okay. There must be a lot of cheese ! It’s cheesing time !
Ben heads towards the back door. Sound of grass.
BEN
Hm? What’s that sound?
A pair of glowing eyes. Cat shows up from the bush.
BEN
Oh no. CAAAAAAAAAAAAAT!
Cat grabs Ben’s tail.
CAT
Silent, rat! I need you to help me. If you wish to cooperate with me, I will spare your mortal life !

BEN
What? What? Cooperate? Yes , yes, I will do anything ! anything ! Hip hop dance, handstand, skydiving, anything!
Cat
I don’t need that useless stuff! Help me to get some cheese. I am tired of the usual food.
BEN
That’s rats’ specialty! Stealing! Haa-haaa! Leave it to ME !
Ben poses like a superhero.
Cat
I hope you don’t talk big, rat.

Cat releases Ben’s tail and they enter the old house.

THE UNEXPECTED RIVAL

INT , Old house, Night     
Ben and the cat start their mission to steal the cheese together.
BEN
Living room, clear ! Dining room, clear! All clear !
Cat
Head for the kitchen. Go go go !
BEN
I can smell the cheese! This way!
They enter the kitchen. It was surprisingly dirty.
CAT
Yeeeeeekk!, what is that thing?
A group of huge,huge cockroaches surround the dirty kitchen.
BEN
Excuse meee.. Hey, fella, mind to share us some cheese? We came all the way down to here.
Cockroach a
Ah, sure. Hey B! Get out from that cheese!
An even bigger cockroach get out from the cheese.
COCKROACH B
Sup’ yo.
Cat
... I don’t want to have a diarrhea. Let’s get out, rat.
cockroach c
Aw, too bad. Krkrkrkrkrkrk (laughing)
Ben and Cat went out disappointed.

EXT , Street, Night
BEN
Oh my, what a disgustingly huge cockroaches, are they mutated or something?
cat
Remembering them giving me a creep. Look, let’s enter the other house.

They enter the other house. It’s as old as the previous house.

INT , Another Old House, Night
BEN
Haha, now the kitchen is ours!
CAT
I hear something.
The cockroaches gang appeared.
BEN
Huh? You again?
COCKROACH A
Yes, we again ! Oh, don’t worry. We knew you need the cheese. Here you go.
Cockroach A gave the cheese to the cat.
Cat
Oh, tha..
Suddenly Cockroach B pop out from the cheese.
Cockroach B
Surprise~.
Cat
NGYAHHHHHHHHHHH !
Cat throws the cheese to the wall. The cheese exploded.
Cockroach b
That’s hurt, yo.
BEN
How come you are so fast?!
Cockroach c
Because we are born in a glorious sewer ! We drink milk and eat beef everyday.
CAT
Nonsense. Let’s get out of here.
    
They get out from the kitchen. Again, the cockroaches laugh at them.

UNITED WE STAND.

EXT , Street, Night
CAT
This is.. the ultimate weapon of destruction.
BEN
Hm? What?
Cat picks up a bug spray from the street. Both of them giggling to each other. And then they enter the third house, which is the last house.

INT , The Third House, Night
BEN
Quick, quick ! This way!
Cat
It’s now or NEVERRRR !
They enter the kitchen. As expected, the cockroaches gang are there.
COCKROACH A
Oh, persistent aren’t you.
Cat
Yeah! This time , we got the present for you !
COCkroach c
Oh no! The DOOM Spray! Run for your live, folks!

Cat start spraying them. One of the cockroach ran to the living room.
COCKROACH A
Hey ! Dog ! Wake up ! Code RED, Code RED!
Cockroach A bite the dog’s nose. Dog awake and he sees the cat and the rat in his line of sight.
dog
..I shall crush the intruder ! Charge of doom !!!!
Dog fiercely ran towards them.
Cat & Ben
Uh-oh.
The Dog beat them up and kick them outside.
Cockroach c
Krkrkrkrkrkr, krkrkrkrkrkrk ! I couldn’t stop laughing !
Cockroach B
United we stand, bros. Hi-five.
The cockroaches dance in joy on the cheese.
cat
… It’s over. Let’s go home rat. I’m tired of this.
Ben
Maybe we lack teamwork?
cat
I don’t care anymore. Bye.
And then they go back to their home disappointedly without bringing anything, while the cockroaches still laughing , dancing, and partying all night long.

Fade out

The end.
     

Sunday, 16 October 2011

Draft2








“Tired of the same food”
by
Gilang Andrian














29 Lor 31 Geylang
Singapore, State  ZIP Code
84813510

FAde In:
The usual night
INT, Abandoned House, Night
A lot of rats in the meeting. Ben came in.
RAT LEADER
Listen, folks! We are going to start the meeting!
Rat chattering each other.
RAT LEADER
Ahmm let’s see. Alpha, Romeo, and Ben. The three of you ! Take care of this week’s supplies!
Ben
Oh Gosh.
RAT leader
Any question? If there is none, dismissed!
Rats dismissed. Ben walks out.

EXT, Street, Night
Ben introduces himself.
BEn
We went out everyday to still supplies. This is my first time hunting. Most of us wouldn’t make it alive. Such a dangerous task.
Ben arrives at a house

EXT, Garden, Night
Ben
This house seems good. Lets do it fast.
Ben sneakily enter the yard. Sound of grass.
BEN
Hm? What’s that?
Cat shows up from the bush.
BEN
Catttttttttttttttttt!
Cat grabs Ben’s tail.
CAT
Silent, I need you to help me. If you wish to cooperate with me, I won’t kill you.

BEN
Really? Okay I’ll do anything! Don’t kill me please!
Cat
Okay, help me to get the cheese. A lot of my friends get sick from eating rats.
Cat releases Ben and they enter the house together …

INT , Someone’s house, night
              
Cat
Go , you lead the way.
BEN
I can smell the cheese! This way!
They went to the kitchen.
CAT
Yeeeeeek!, what is that thing?
A group of huge cockroaches surround the dirty kitchen
BEN
Hey, guys, mind to share us some cheese?
Cockroach a
Ah, sure. Hey B! Get out from that cheese!
An even bigger cockroach get out from the cheese.
COCKROACH B
Sup’ yo.
Cat
Yeeek, nevermind. I don’t want to have a diarrhea. Let’s get out, rat.
cockroach c
Aw, too bad. Krkrkrkrkrkrk (laughing)
Rat and Cat went out.

EXT , Street, Night
BEN
Aw, that cockroaches are fast.
cat
I know! Come here earlier tomorrow. We must steal the next cheese before them.
Tomorrow , they meet again at the same place, and they sneak in the house again.
Cat
Haha, now the kitchen is ours!
BEN
Hmm, are you sure?
The cockroaches swarming the kitchen.
Cockroach a
Huh? You again?
CAT
Listen, we need the cheese. I hope you..
A cockroach pop out from the cheese.
Cockroach B
Sup, yo.
The two other cockroaches rolling while laughing.
Rat and cat get out of the kitchen.
Cat
They must live in this house. No matter they are fast.
BEN
Why don’t we wake the owner up to kill them?
CAT
Smart rat.
Then they go upstairs to the bedroom.

INT, Bedroom, night
Cat
Oh my, what a terrible room.
BEN
I go wake them up and lure them to the kitchen !
Rat slip on the owner bed.
OWNER
Gyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah, ratttttttttttttt !
Cat
Aw, my ears.
  
Rat ran away being chased by the owner to the kitchen.
Cockroach A
Wow, an epic chase scene.
Cockroach B
Epic.
Cockroach C
Krkrkrkrkr. Stupid fellows.
After escaped from the owner, rat came back to the house. There he meet the cat.
Cat
Forget it, rat.
BEN
Why?! I’m almost died!
Cat
The owner.. own the cockroach. They are his pet. The cockroaches told me back then.
BEN
So gross, I might get a diarrhea by eating that cheese. His food must be really dirty.
Cat
Well, after all. I’m gonna eat weed today.I can die from starvation.
Walking out, the three cockroaches laughed at them loudly from the window.
BEN
Oh my, they are annoying! We need payback!
Cat
Forget about the cheese. Come back tomorrow. We will make their life worse than ever !
[Narrator]
And so the battle between the kitchen cockroaches and the Cat and Rat duo began.

Fade out

The end.
     

Sunday, 9 October 2011

Class Exercise

Step 1

Story 1 : Character driven story.
Ben Bill wandering around and playing pranks to the neighbourhood

Story 2 : Story driven by a location.
The garden defies the season change, it keeps snowing even though it is winter.

Story 3 : driven by an item.
A legendary socks is searched by the whole country to let their country win the Olympic Games.

Story 4 : driven by situation
Two man and a boy playing monopoly together in a supermarket.

Story 5 : motives
A snake and a frog join forces to destroy the rabbit's nest.

Story 6 :
A group of childhood friend become a soldier to fight in the name of their family.

Story 7 :
A bamboo cutter found a gold bamboo tree and cut the tree to sell it.

Story 8 :
A man trying to suicide, instead of losing his life he gain eternal life instead.

Story 9 :
A super keyboard is invented by a dog, and the cat tries to steal it.

Story 10 :
Walking pencil is bullied by erasers and correction fluids.

Step 2


Story 11 : Drama
A boy and a girl met again after being separated since childhood.

Story 12 : Documentary
A report from a former SS officer during World war 2 era.

Story 13 : News
20 boy reported smuggling a supermarket near Bogor.

Story 14 : Comedy
A clown and an old man get into the stage to cheer the audience up.

Story 15 : Horror
A dead spirit is wandering around in Jamie's new house to disturb them.

Story 16 : Action
A former samurai engage in a mission to rescue his daughter from a band of ninjas.

Story 17 : Mystery
Time traveler come and leave a message to a boy to warn him that something will happen two days later.

Story 18 : Teenage Drama
Three college boys work together to make a famous girl fall in love with one of them.

Story 19 : Romance
A neet find his true love from the internet and he try his best to meet with her even though she is from different country.

Story 20 : Fantasy
A star is going to hit Earth in 3 days, humans unite to destroy the star before it reach earth.

Story 21 : Children
Two dolls get the ability to a sad boy whom loses his parents .

Story 22 : Adventure
Group of childhood friend is in a journey to find their lost friend.

Story 23 - 25 : combination
23 :
A wandering ghost tried to scare as many kid as possible in order to leave the earth.

24 :
A stupid dog is scared of the neighbor cat, which the cat is in love with the dog.

25 :
A boy and a girl find a stair which led them to the kingdom of clouds, where the king is dying and need someone to replace him.

STEP 3 :

Drama : Titanic
Documentary :
News :
Comedy : Mr Bean
Horror : The Ring
Action : Taken
Thriller : Identity
Teenage Drama :
Romance : Revolutionary Road
Fantasy : Lord of The Ring
Children :
Adventure : Narnia
Mixed : Final Destination

Script 1


 TIRED OF THE SAME FOOD

ACT ONE – The day of Mission
Scene one – Abandoned house
A dark room. A lot of rats talking. Dim light from the window. Ben, a small rat is attending daily meeting.
Rat Leader : [walk to the podium] Okay folks. Listen. We will began the usual meeting!
Other rats talk to each other.
Rat Leader : [reading a piece of paper] Alpha, Romeo.. Ben. The three of you! Take care of today’s supplies!
Ben : Oh gosh.
Rat Leader : Is there any question? If not, meeting dismissed! The three of you, come back as quick as possible!
Other rats go back to their hole. Ben walks out to the street.
Scene two – Street Night
Ben walks alone in the street.
Ben : [talking to the audience while walking] This is our daily mission. We went out everyday to steal supplies. Usually cheese. When you are chosen for the mission. It’s a life and death mission. No one loves rat. Usually we got killed by human trap, and cats, and some other died by starvation.
Ben smells something. Stop and look at a house.
Ben : Ah, this house seems safe. [walk to the house]
Ben walks sneakily in the garden. The garden is grassy.
Ben : [looks nervous] I must be fine. I must be fine. No one is awake. No one awake..
[Sound of grass rustling] Ben shocked silently. Cat comes in
Ben : [yell loudly] CATTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Tries to run away but his tail get caught by the cat.
Cat : Hey silent, come here for a moment. [cat drags ben to the corner of the hedge].
Ben : Ah no, I’m dead! I’m dead! [struggling]

Scene 3 : Corner of the garden
In the corner of the hedge. Dark. Almost  no light came in.
Cat : [still holding Ben’s tail] Hey listen, I’m not going to eat you. I need your help.
Ben: [closes his eye with his hand] Help?
Cat : Yea. I got sick of rat. Last time my cat fellow got a diarrhea from eating a dirty rat. So I’m not going to eat you today. But I need your help. And, if you refuse..
Ben : [open his eyes panickly] Yes , yes! I will do anything as long as you don’t kill me!
Cat : Okay, listen. I want cheese. Your usual food. They looks great and tasty. And I thought that you rats are more experienced at locating food. So I need your nose! [point at Ben’s nose]
Ben : Ooo..kay. What a strange rat. [talks silently]
Cat : Did . You . Say . Something ? [move his head closer to the rat]
Ben : [smiling] No sir! No!
Cat : Okay, good. Now lead the way. If you try to run away, I will chase you, catch you, and kill you..
Ben : I wont run away okay..
Cat releases Ben’s tail
Cat : Okay. Lead the way, rat. [releases Ben’s tail]
The cat and the rat begin to walk toward the house. The backdoor is open.

ACT TWO – Clearing the Obstacle

Scene 4 : Someone’s house. Back Part of the house.
Cat and rat walk together sneakily. The house is bright.
Cat : Ah good. The owners are asleep. I can hear their beautiful snoring sound. [twitches ear]
Ben : Okay.. [looks down, nervous]
In front of them lies a cheese in the floor.
Ben  : [sniff sniff] Aha! I smell cheese. Where is it where is it? [looks around] There ! [pointing at the cheese, and try to move]
Cat grab rat tail again.
Cat : Hahhhh. Why rats are so stupid. Of course that’s a trap. See that board? [ pointing at a thin board in the floor.]
Ben : ah. I didn’t see it.. Thanks.. [looks down]
Cat : Whatever. [releases tail] We should look for the kitchen. The cheese must be there. Can you smell it from here?
Ben : [sniffing] I can’t. We must move closer.
Cat : Just don’t die yet.
They continue to move slowly.
A small footstep sound.
Cat : [grab Ben’s tail] Hold. I hear something.
A four legged creature shadow move from between the room.
Rat : Another cat?
Cat : [swallow throat] No, its..
The four legged creature now can be seen clearly. It’s a dog.
Cat : It must be a cat. Haha. [scratch eyes] [1 sec silent.] [the dog and the cat stares at each other.]
Cat yells loudly. “DOOOOOOOOGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!”
Cat ran behind the rat.
Ben : Hey hey! Calm down now! [looks at the cat. And then look at the dog.] Ehm. Hi.[smiles beautifully]
Dog : … [thinking, 1 sec pause]
Cat hid behind rat’s back, shivering fearfully.
Ben : sst, quiet quiet. Don’t bark now. [approaching dog slowly, try to calm him down
Dog tries to open his mouth slowly.
Ben : uh-oh [stop]
Dog : RATTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! He yelled loudly , ran away , and jump through the window.
Ben : [surprised] … [poke cat] hey its over. The dog is gone.
Cat : [open eyes] for real? Hmm. I just knew that dogs are afraid of rats.
Ben : one of a kind dog.
Act 3 : Treasury

Scene 5 : Kitchen
Ben and the cat arrived at the kitchen.
Ben : We are here. Safely [sigh]
Cat : This is the treasure room. Both of us nearly dead. [wipes sweat]. Where is the cheese now?
Ben : [pointing at one of the shelf] there.
Cat leaps through the kitchen easily, open the shelf and bring out two packs of cheese.
Cat : 50 50 okay? [smiling] You saved my life, so we are even. [ offering a pack of cheese ]
Ben : Deal ! [takes a pack of cheese from the cat]
Cat : okay, now let’s get out of here before the hound came back ! [painful expression]
They escape the house through the window.

Scene 6 : night
Cat and Ben walks together side by side.
Cat opens the pack of cheese and eat it
Cat : [happy expression] Wow, this is delicious! Rats are nothing compared to this! [smiling]
Ben : [looks at cat] maybe you should stop hunting rat and hunt cheese instead. [laugh]
Cat : Ah, not a bad idea. Next time? [looks at Ben]
Ben : Sure ! [shakes hand]

Fade out